From Tracie: Crack

Monday, July 15, 2013

Crack

His hands became gentle.
His words sounded like love.

He did not notice her studying him through her almost-closed lashes.
He kept his countenance carefully blank, but she knew where to find the crack - in his eyes.

She sought it out, and found his true feelings.
Hate shined through.

He would hit her again.


Trifecta Writing Prompt:
Crack - a narrow break : fissure

22 comments:

  1. Painful but very well-written! 'Crack' is a word that seems to suggest pain.

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  2. Powerful. Thank you for linking up! Mary Beth

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  3. Oh, yikes! Well done. It's amazing how much you can convey with just a few lines, Tracie. I impressed, as usual! --Lisa

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  4. Shows the people I've been around lately - I came here wondering why you were doing a drug-related post....!

    Very well done though :)

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  5. Yikes! That was a bit of a twist. I hope she leaves before he does hit her again. Powerful!

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  6. Well written and sad, good use of the word :)

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  7. What menacing eyes he must have had!

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  8. What a horrible relationship to be stuck in.

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  9. succint ... no more words !

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  10. Not all who are in this situation have the "vision" to see the situation as it truly is. But then even when they do, the courage to turn away is hard to summon.

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  11. Sadly, the woman usually will stay and take the abuse. This hit home for me. Well written and thought provoking.

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  12. Wow, such a sad and powerful story in such few words. Great use of words and great use of drawing the reader's emotions!

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  13. Powerfully done! So much said so simply.

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  14. I hope this did not come from personal experience.

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  15. I had a bad feeling right from the first line...Powerful piece.

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  16. You get right to the heart of things, Tracie--very powerful piece.

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  17. Holy moly! Left me with a real feeling of dread. Nice job with very few words.

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  18. well done; this piece draws the emotions.

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  19. Scary! But I'm optimistic that she is on the way out, no longer thinking that those soft words and touches are anything but a con job. Love this tight little story!

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